Blood Wars: A Brother's Redemption

Hey guys I'm James (aka @thommoj03 on Twitter) and Rei has kindly allowed me to write on her blog. As an aspiring screenwriter I one day hope to get one of my screenplays to the big screen (we can all dream right!) and I wanted to get your views on my latest idea. Check it out and I would love as much feedback on this as possible. Thank you.


In a world where vampires live among us in the shadows each night, Raven and Simeon are vampire hunters who have been forced to protect their district in fear of impending attacks on unsuspecting locals. Raven has been protecting the people for many years whilst Simeon has been trained by his older brother in order to one day take over from the one he holds dearest. 
When a routine night descends into a horrific ambush, Raven is turned by the vampires and is embraced by them as one of their leaders along with current vampire overseer Nexaddo. Despite Nexaddo's initial hate of Raven's newfound leadership, the pair begin to evolve as a devastating force capable of leading their kind to the destruction of the humans.
With Raven and Nexaddo unleashing a path of death and destruction under the cover of darkness, Simeon soon realises that he must do the unthinkable, fight his brother to the death in order to save the world he lives in. Will he have it in him to kill the brother he has held so dearest or will Raven and the vampires suffice and begin their rule over the humans?


I would love to get your thoughts, criticisms or any ideas on the above synopsis. In addition, further ideas have resulted in me thinking about possibly adding the prospect of a serum to cure those turned to the vampire side, is this something I could add in? Thanks for your support guys and gals!