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Monday, October 24, 2011

Blood Wars: A Brother's Redemption

Hey guys I'm James (aka @thommoj03 on Twitter) and Rei has kindly allowed me to write on her blog. As an aspiring screenwriter I one day hope to get one of my screenplays to the big screen (we can all dream right!) and I wanted to get your views on my latest idea. Check it out and I would love as much feedback on this as possible. Thank you.


In a world where vampires live among us in the shadows each night, Raven and Simeon are vampire hunters who have been forced to protect their district in fear of impending attacks on unsuspecting locals. Raven has been protecting the people for many years whilst Simeon has been trained by his older brother in order to one day take over from the one he holds dearest. 
When a routine night descends into a horrific ambush, Raven is turned by the vampires and is embraced by them as one of their leaders along with current vampire overseer Nexaddo. Despite Nexaddo's initial hate of Raven's newfound leadership, the pair begin to evolve as a devastating force capable of leading their kind to the destruction of the humans.
With Raven and Nexaddo unleashing a path of death and destruction under the cover of darkness, Simeon soon realises that he must do the unthinkable, fight his brother to the death in order to save the world he lives in. Will he have it in him to kill the brother he has held so dearest or will Raven and the vampires suffice and begin their rule over the humans?


I would love to get your thoughts, criticisms or any ideas on the above synopsis. In addition, further ideas have resulted in me thinking about possibly adding the prospect of a serum to cure those turned to the vampire side, is this something I could add in? Thanks for your support guys and gals!

17 comments:

  1. Sounds interesting. Kinda over vampires tho

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  2. I think it sounds interesting and besides, vampires are eternal. I'm sick of seeing vampire movies too but this sounds like a lot of fun. Will there be conflict between the two vampire high rakies? That would also add to the story, I think.
    I love the idea. And I'm glad that Rhiannon could aid you James with her blog. Good luck on the screen play and I hope to see it in cinemas some day :-)

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  3. Not loving the idea. Is it horror or a thriller? Is there lots of voilence or is it this PG shit we're seeing so much of lately? It's semi original in my eyes but if done well and written well then I could see it doing well.

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  4. This sounds like a war between humans and vampires. Me likey

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  5. Thanks for the comments people! I would say i want this to be a gritty R rated horror thriller (none of that Twilight bullshit). Admittedly the brother bond is key to the story but this is essential to me. Definitely confrontation between Raven and Nexaddo will occur, he won't just let Raven steal his thunder so easy!

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  6. I like it and after reading your added comment James, I got to say I'm loving the idea more.

    Although in saying that, I would like to read some of your work to see how well you can write this. Giving a synopsis with detail as above is great, but if you want real opinions on something you want to create, we should be able to read something of yours whether it be a short story of part of the work you've done so far on the above mentioned project.

    Rhiannon gave us the synopsis for Ahlephia then has backed up her writing skills with revealing chapter 1 plus short stories, both erotica and horror. Which just makes me want to read her books even more.

    I will say that the idea is original, a horror/thriller is always a plus in my book so regardless of how well you write, it's something I would pay to see.

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  7. Thanks Dom and yes i will follow up with some samples as i get it written.

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  8. I like the initial idea but the prospect of a serum to cure those turned to the vampire side might be a bit much. I think the only choice a vampire should have is at death. Do they just die or beg to be turned to the dark side. Very Interview With The Vampire deal.
    I agree with Dom too. We already know of Rei's writing style. We want to see your work too. If she's promoting you on here, then you must be good too.

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  9. I like the idea of being able to turn the vamps back to human form by use of a serum. I like the idea that they have a choice. I like the whole idea. Much better than the sparkly vampire crap we've had to deal with in the past few years.

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  10. Not another vampire tale. I'm so over the bloodsuckers.

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  11. Sounds interesting and more importantly originial. I'm with CiCi though, I don't like the idea of being able to become human again with a serum. Once a vamp, always a vamp. I also agree that we need to see some work of yours James so we can properly assess how this story might unfold. Otherwise it's something I'd pay to see

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  12. Thank you for the comments everyone. Keep them coming. Much appreciated! : )

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  13. I'm not too sure this is something I would see but the concept it cool. Besides, when it comes to your writing projects, you do what you think is best and then people have to accept your vision.

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  14. Thank you everyone for the fantastic comments and you can rest assure that i have taken them all on board. Also a huge thanks to Rei for letting me spread my vision on her blog!!

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  15. Anytime James. You're always welcome to spread your wings on this blog and let all that creativity come alive.

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  16. Great concept. I like the humans vs. vampires thing and the idea of the serum is pretty nifty too. Great idea, James and welcome aboard the Final Curtain train

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